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#10 - i think when you start giving rules for how art should be, yo…  [+] (2 replies) 10/30/2014 on poem I wrote called "The... 0
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#12 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
While that is true, you still need more of an artistic expression in it.
I agree with the rules part, but I never made rules, I was speaking as an observer and giving criticism.
#14 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
i just posted another, let me know if it better fits your rubric
#7 - you're right, that's kinda what it was supposed to be. i didnt…  [+] (7 replies) 10/29/2014 on poem I wrote called "The... 0
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#9 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
And people can relate more when you use metaphors.
Then people want to understand, they start to love the fact that they can also relate in some way.
If someone has never felt this way, they can't have any emotions to it.
It doesn't have anything that strikes an emotional nerve in them, it's just your words.

Again, it was good for what you were going for and I respect that.
I just think you can do better and help people relate to it more using metaphors and such to relate to what you're saying.
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#8 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
Then it is not an artistic poem.

Which is not a good poem. You're supposed to reference stuff, use metaphors, go in depth.
Not just sum up your feelings by saying them to rhyme.

Poems are pieces of art and should be treated as such.
Art is supposed to have the artists view, but then a subjective (opinion) view that others can have a debate about it's exact meaning and what it means to them.
Art is supposed to reflect feelings and inflict them at the same time, not just get your feelings out.
You need to relate to the observer.
And you can achieve this through metaphors, because metaphors can be interpreted in various ways, it's what the observer wants.
That is how to catch ones love for your words.

It's good for what you were going for.
All I'm trying to encourage is deeper and more artistic thought behind it.
It is a piece of art.
#11 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
but if you're looking for a little more imagery, i'll post another.
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#13 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
Give it thought and send it to me in a private message or respond to this comment.
I'll read it and tell you what I think from the listeners point of view.
#10 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
i think when you start giving rules for how art should be, you start destroying it. art should be involuntary. you shouldnt have to open a rulebook, or study a manual. you should just do it. i'm not saying you cant pick things up from other artists, but saying you have to reference stuff gives you less options. and art isn't about making an effort to relate to the observer, it's about putting it out there and seeing who relates. writers dont write for their readers, readers read for the writer.
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#12 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
While that is true, you still need more of an artistic expression in it.
I agree with the rules part, but I never made rules, I was speaking as an observer and giving criticism.
#14 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
i just posted another, let me know if it better fits your rubric
#4 - what do you mean by bland?  [+] (9 replies) 10/29/2014 on poem I wrote called "The... 0
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#6 - darksideofthebeast (10/29/2014) [-]
It's lacking any interpretation room.
It's just angsty thoughts.
#7 - tedge (10/29/2014) [-]
you're right, that's kinda what it was supposed to be. i didnt want to leave the meaning up to the reader. i had something to say. i have this fear of being misunderstood.
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#9 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
And people can relate more when you use metaphors.
Then people want to understand, they start to love the fact that they can also relate in some way.
If someone has never felt this way, they can't have any emotions to it.
It doesn't have anything that strikes an emotional nerve in them, it's just your words.

Again, it was good for what you were going for and I respect that.
I just think you can do better and help people relate to it more using metaphors and such to relate to what you're saying.
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#8 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
Then it is not an artistic poem.

Which is not a good poem. You're supposed to reference stuff, use metaphors, go in depth.
Not just sum up your feelings by saying them to rhyme.

Poems are pieces of art and should be treated as such.
Art is supposed to have the artists view, but then a subjective (opinion) view that others can have a debate about it's exact meaning and what it means to them.
Art is supposed to reflect feelings and inflict them at the same time, not just get your feelings out.
You need to relate to the observer.
And you can achieve this through metaphors, because metaphors can be interpreted in various ways, it's what the observer wants.
That is how to catch ones love for your words.

It's good for what you were going for.
All I'm trying to encourage is deeper and more artistic thought behind it.
It is a piece of art.
#11 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
but if you're looking for a little more imagery, i'll post another.
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#13 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
Give it thought and send it to me in a private message or respond to this comment.
I'll read it and tell you what I think from the listeners point of view.
#10 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
i think when you start giving rules for how art should be, you start destroying it. art should be involuntary. you shouldnt have to open a rulebook, or study a manual. you should just do it. i'm not saying you cant pick things up from other artists, but saying you have to reference stuff gives you less options. and art isn't about making an effort to relate to the observer, it's about putting it out there and seeing who relates. writers dont write for their readers, readers read for the writer.
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#12 - darksideofthebeast (10/30/2014) [-]
While that is true, you still need more of an artistic expression in it.
I agree with the rules part, but I never made rules, I was speaking as an observer and giving criticism.
#14 - tedge (10/30/2014) [-]
i just posted another, let me know if it better fits your rubric
#3 - Well, hi.  [+] (1 reply) 10/29/2014 on poem I wrote called "The... 0
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#5 - thatlittledoll (10/29/2014) [-]
Hello there... ;)
#8 - looking for feedback?  [+] (1 reply) 10/29/2014 on Just a bit of poetry 0
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#9 - bearbearington (11/03/2014) [-]
I wasn't, but it is not unwelcome.
#197 - i agree the father has equal rights to his child. but i think …  [+] (2 replies) 10/28/2014 on Real Equality +1
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#200 - heartlessrobot (10/28/2014) [-]
Right, but who is more suited to support the child?
#202 - tedge (10/28/2014) [-]
this is why the whole two people thing seems to work pretty well.