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walrusnipples (06/24/2012) [-]
i ended up falling asleep after chapter 1 and the only things I found bad was there are some grammatical errors. But those are easily fixed. Applejack's demeanor changes somewhat. Sometimes she's country, sometimes she's black, and sometimes she's white But all in all i liked it and i shall continue reading
I got better at writing for Applejack later, and chapter 1 is no indicator of the overall story. It's easily my least favorite chapter, followed closely by chapter 2. I wasn't totally serious about this project until chapter 3 and onwards, because the first 2 I considered to be generic setting chapters, and I borrowed heavily from other fan fictions to get there. Although, if you liked even these not so great early chapters, then that's great news for future readings. Keep up reading, and I'll keep writing them.
oh i know i cant judge the entire story upon the first chapter, the first chapter is normally the worst anyways, i liked it and i think the story has great potential, i have alot of crap to do today so i might be able to read some more tonight.
speaking of things to do tonight, I've got to write more on chapter 11. Don't know if I can get it done tonight, but even if I don't, whatever might be left is a tiny amount of work. I'm half done it. Then it's chapter 12 and 13, and I'm done! Then I take a break for about a month, and i begin to write the sequel. I'm really anticipating the sequel. It's going to be longer and a lot more involved. A few more characters will be introduced, including more original ones and even some real characters from the series that have yet to see any lime-light. The story will center more around Maree, but Rainbow Dash will still have a major supporting role, and so will Twilight. But for now, I shall focus on the task at hand and complete this one.