I FUCKING LOVE IT!!!!!!

I've written an introduction and chapters 1 and 2.

thank you for inspiring me.

No problem. If you feel like you need help with it or whatever just ask. I'll read each chapter and tell you what I think if you want? I want to read it when you're done!!

you can read the intro and chap 1 right now if you want.

yes please!

The Beginning and the End


Introduction:
Before the event known as, “The Creation,” there were two Companies that had similar goals, but with different preferred methods of attaining them. First off was a PMC (Private Military Corporation) group without a name. They take in skilled soldiers that only need a place to stay, similar to MSF or Soldiers Without Borders. Second was known as the United Federation of Eternity. In 2709, the UNSC fell, and this is where the United Federation of Eternity stepped in. They picked up the shattered pieces and disputing factions, and reorganized it. With more funding and help with the nameless PMC Corporation, together they studied countless numbers of successful soldiers, and tried to get the perfect combination of all the genes.

Chapter 1?
The United Federation of Eternity first examined Big Boss. At first they wanted to take his base genes, however after reviewing data, Big Boss’ clone, known as Solid Snake, he ended up defeating his father. Next they reviewed Goku. Goku’s saiyan traits were taken such as: Quick healing, immense power level boost after near death experience, etc. Then, his values were taken, such as an immense sense of justice, fighting for fun, always trying to achieve more. However, he couldn’t be a white knight. Both companies have shady business in which assassinations must take place, and thus, DNA from Altair, Ezio, and Connor. He knows Justice, yet a soldier who follows orders no matter what the loss. Finally, he needs to be dark and needs to know the ways of shadow, therefore, they through in Scorpion, Batman, Nightmare the entity of Soul Edge, and Meta-knight. The new and ultimate super soldier also needed intelligence. L’s frozen brain was cloned, and modified for a base with cells from Shikamaru’s brain. That takes care of base ability plus quick reaction time and strategist. An estimated IQ of over 500. A necessary but unintentional effect with the combination of all the epic genes was immortality.

Thank you, what do you mean though, by "complications with different readers?"

I think I am going to combine chapter 2 and 1.

Well like you said before, some readers might not know who some of the characters are or might not like what you're doing with the characters. It is a matter of preference really, some people might like the idea that you're putting these characters in the book, others might not. I think you should at least change the characters names a little bit but make sure they are recognizable, like when you see an anime reference in another anime, ya know? This will make sure nobody can complain about you using the characters. But like I said before, this is a just a suggestion, in reality it is YOUR story after all.

ok thank you for the tips.

Anytime, let me know when you're ready to let me read another one!

I'm not done with chapter 2 but here is what is done so far, just so you know I havn't worked on this since the last time we spoke, it's just been sitting on my desktop, I planned to finish it and then send but whatever, I'll finish it and write a chapter 3 later if you are stil linterested in the story.

Chapter 2?
Using the latest technology they brought life to Him. He appeared to be about 9, face already sullen from combat experience yet to happen. Brown-Black hair that resembled L’s, muscular frame. BAM! Every computer in the room exploded as soon as His eyes opened. Lightening was shooting out of every surface, even the ones made out of “Nonconductive elements.” At this point not a single measurement of time has passed yet, and just then, the UFE froze time. Split his persona in two, and kept the two children apart from each other. They did this to split the genes un-evenly.