moving here would make this easier, as for your writing style what causes the biggest impact on how your reading read it the words that are use, you tend to use language of a decent level which isn't bad but constant use of that in your content makes it seem like your are trying to make your writing sound smarter which dries it up for the reader. Next is detail you tend to go into a lot of detain and explanation in your story a good deal of it is unnecessary you don't need to tell us that you mop, take out the trash and all that if you just say your job is to keep the restaurant clean we will get the message. Next is the flow of your writing, you write very stiffly like you are planning to have this peer reviewed or something, for this kind of content you want to have it flow smoothly to check this read it out loud if you cant read it without stumbling or slowing down it has good flow. Another point for this kind of content is the length of your sentences, if your look at sir brent coles mcdisasters the sentences are very short and to the point, even when he throws in jokes that is a good way to have your sentences for this kind of content.