Hawke's Shadows, Chapter 2. Chapter 1: www.funnyjunk.com/funny_pictures/3840635/Hawke+s+Shadows+Chapter+1+a+bit+long/ this is chapter two of what ive been writi
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Hawke's Shadows, Chapter 2

Chapter 1:
www.funnyjunk.com/funny_pictures/3840635/Hawke+s+Shadows+Chapter+1+a+bit+long/

this is chapter two of what ive been writing, thank you to those who take the time to read it, i prefer comments over anything, thank you

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Submitted: 06/29/2012
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User avatar #3 - candypuff (06/30/2012) [+] (1 reply)
there was a part in there that had the quotation mark before the talking but thats the only mistake i saw other then that very good i cant wait for the next chapter
#1 - olemonheado (06/29/2012) [+] (1 reply)
well done guys
#5 - sovietllama (06/30/2012) [+] (4 replies)
You took the awesomeness of the first chapter, and made it even better in this one. I'm actually greatly impressed. Are you a professional author, or just a part time indie writer? I don't know what it is you're doing, but it's great.    
   
The whole shift in the time zone kind of blew me away. I was thinking "GUNS?? AIRSHIPS?? ENGINES?? WWWWOOOOOOAAAHHH" :p That makes THIS story different from the others, which is completely bad-ass.    
   
Once again, the weapon descriptions were epic. It left keen images imbedded in my head. Also overall descriptions have boosted. I haven't seen any vague sentences! These two girls have very interesting personalities. Gentle and shy, yet tough and adventurous at the same time. It's hard to explain, but... they're great.    
   
Keep up the AWESOME work bro. I can't wait to see chapter 3! (the extra day wait was well worth it :p) *BTW when you're done with the book, show this to your local publisher and become an official author. (if not one already)*
You took the awesomeness of the first chapter, and made it even better in this one. I'm actually greatly impressed. Are you a professional author, or just a part time indie writer? I don't know what it is you're doing, but it's great.

The whole shift in the time zone kind of blew me away. I was thinking "GUNS?? AIRSHIPS?? ENGINES?? WWWWOOOOOOAAAHHH" :p That makes THIS story different from the others, which is completely bad-ass.

Once again, the weapon descriptions were epic. It left keen images imbedded in my head. Also overall descriptions have boosted. I haven't seen any vague sentences! These two girls have very interesting personalities. Gentle and shy, yet tough and adventurous at the same time. It's hard to explain, but... they're great.

Keep up the AWESOME work bro. I can't wait to see chapter 3! (the extra day wait was well worth it :p) *BTW when you're done with the book, show this to your local publisher and become an official author. (if not one already)*
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