MLP Fanfic is Complete

wow i read the whole thing.... good story! just a few grammar and spelling errors

Well I have read all the chapters and I thought it was quite a good story, I mean you didn't go over the top with the shipping which was nice, so yea you definitely have potential. The only thing I would say it watch your grammar when writing, I did spot some mistakes, at least I am pretty sure they were mistakes, anyway I thought the ending was quite good, I admit I did see it coming but I suppose that is what the story entitles.
Either way for your first fanfic I thought it was pretty good.

If you need an editor, I'd be glad to try ^^