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> hey anon, wanna give your opinion?
User avatar #15 - propone
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(05/03/2012) [-]
Well, second time today i screw up with my 15 min long written comment...


Well, again, long story short: i have many question, about the woman, the next step of the story, the zombies, the organisation behind this, relation between people, but from what i see, it seems okay.

Also, some comments: "one year and 3 month", well that's acurate, but is it necesary? "More than a year" might fit better, depending on the mood of the writer/narrator (is he writing a diary there?)

Same about the number of other centers. If this is gonna be a sort of "post-apocaliptic" novel, i think there is something important: lack of information. Nowadays, we have too much of it. If the character lacks of information (number of center still ok, the situation in other countries, military situation, and so on...), it will naturally create an atmosphere that will suit perfectly to the chosen theme.

I don't pretend to have any literrature skill (being scientist), i just hope that helped you :)

Note: sorry for any grammar/spelling mistake, english isn't my main language...
User avatar #16 to #15 - fudgeandjunkies [OP]
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(05/03/2012) [-]
Thanks for the feedback. I'll take that into account.