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Submitted: 05/02/2012
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User avatar #5 - katluv (05/02/2012) [+] (2 replies)
NIce start definitely, I want to
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#1 - iplaygibson (05/02/2012) [+] (4 replies)
I want to know what happened to his wife. Does she get banged by super mutant psychos? I think you should add that in, make it a zombie porn-o. Or not, it's your story, just sayin', I want to read more, so Link me up to a full version when you've finished it :D!
User avatar #7 - fudgeandjunkies (05/02/2012) [-]
Thank you for all the positive feedback. I will definitely go on with writing the story. I will try my best to make it the best story possible.
#3 - yourfav (05/02/2012) [+] (1 reply)
meee mmeeee i wish to read this as well i sell rape
User avatar #15 - propone (05/03/2012) [+] (1 reply)
Well, second time today i screw up with my 15 min long written comment...

**** .

Well, again, long story short: i have many question, about the woman, the next step of the story, the zombies, the organisation behind this, relation between people, but from what i see, it seems okay.

Also, some comments: "one year and 3 month", well that's acurate, but is it necesary? "More than a year" might fit better, depending on the mood of the writer/narrator (is he writing a diary there?)

Same about the number of other centers. If this is gonna be a sort of "post-apocaliptic" novel, i think there is something important: lack of information. Nowadays, we have too much of it. If the character lacks of information (number of center still ok, the situation in other countries, military situation, and so on...), it will naturally create an atmosphere that will suit perfectly to the chosen theme.

I don't pretend to have any literrature skill (being scientist), i just hope that helped you :)

Note: sorry for any grammar/spelling mistake, english isn't my main language...
#6 - cllrthnurs (05/02/2012) [-]
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