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Six Word Stories #1. So here it is! By popular demand! (And I really do listen to comments that are constructive so speak up) I have to admit I had a great time

So here it is! By popular demand! (And I really do listen to comments that are constructive so speak up) I have to admit I had a great time writing them and think the skills will help make more concise and biting Two Sentence Stories eventually. Remember, I'm hosting a monthly writing contest on my site so please consider entering: www.btschweitzer.com/contests/contestdecember2015/.

Let me know what you think and how I can improve as a writer or what types of content you would like to see in the future!

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+50 Keep Going or -25 Write even SHORTER Fiction

By Popular request this is my first Six Word Story Comp. I'll be releasing them during the month of December. If people enjoy them I might make them a regular weekly comp.
Six Word Stories #1: This one!
Six Word Stories #2: Monday 12/14!

My other comp Two Sentence Stories is currently on #24: /channel/morbid-channel/Two+sentence+sto ries+24/cbhfLpo/ with #25 coming out tomorrow!

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#4 - pentol (12/09/2015) [-]

I didn't sign up for this

The pills make my feelings flat

Even the engineers work in healthcare

My bedsheets needs a day off

This particular sock, i don't wear

Without consequence, i sleep fourteen hours

He didn't suit up for Christmas

The other end went deathly silent

Beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beeeeeeeep

"You! Stop!" "I said stop!" Bang

He wasn't wanted. He opened fire

He wrote stories for internet points.

#11 to #4 - btschweitzer [OP](12/16/2015) [-]

That last one really is terrifying. Some of the others are a little more unclear but still a good effort. I chuckled at #5 and #9 is clever but might be better represented by the actual Lub-Dub sounds on a monitor . Sorry it's taken me awhile to respond thought I had to all of them.

#13 to #11 - pentol (12/16/2015) [-]

most of them are about my life. you might enjoy some explanations?

the engineers one is about the local oil industry in recession, lots of highly qualified people out of jobs taking just about anything they can get.

bedsheets need a day off, because i spend all day in bed, never getting up, because i am depressed and unemployed. same about why there is no consequence to sleep for 14 hours.

not suiting up for christmas indicates there are nobody he has to dress to impress for, AKA he isn't meeting friends or family. this one is my favorite story of the bunch.

#14 to #13 - btschweitzer [OP](12/17/2015) [-]

If you ever want to talk or something PM me. I'll listen. Good that you are turning stuff into writing.

#5 to #4 - bronywiseman ONLINE (12/10/2015) [-]

That last one is the scariest of all.

#10 to #5 - btschweitzer [OP](12/16/2015) [-]

Don't we all? Sorry I didn't respond sooner thought I had to all the comments last week...

#7 - krasnogvardiech (12/10/2015) [-]

One ticket to hell, please. Returning.

Why do they walk? They're dead.

Do you feel lucky, punk? Well?

#9 to #7 - btschweitzer [OP](12/16/2015) [-]

Sorry I didn't respond earlier - thought I did but yeah..... I like the cut of your jib. The first two are fairly good.

#1 - ubercookieboy (12/09/2015) [-]

Everyone agrees Hitler did nothing wrong

#2 to #1 - ubercookieboy (12/09/2015) [-]

...

The ****** that on the head of my avatar?

#6 - vortisred (12/10/2015) [-]

I am sorry but can't stop.
Its not me, we still shared.
Showers were cold, grass is colder.
Forever twenty one, bastard showed them.
Red screen, blue screen, missing theme.
Fingers tapped, muscles out of tune.
Sinking feeling, melting chest, burnt toast.
Around her neck, she fell faster.
In their mouths, up in smoke.
In their mouths, down the drain.
In their mouths, out of place.
(in their mouths, that ****** gay)
Morning returns, mourning leaves, morning leaves.
Christmas shoes, too little, scamming bastard.
Saving face, but discarding his life.
The second hand takes a minute.
Replace the filters, and call exterminators.
Replace the filters, and breathe easy.
Replace the filters, and enunciate, please.

What's the best way to do these? Making a story with six words is difficult.

#12 to #6 - btschweitzer [OP](12/16/2015) [-]

I'm sorry it's taken me this long to respond - it was your comment in particular that made me think of checking this comp in the first place since I knew I wanted to respond to you. Well I never said it would be easy! lmao.
Truth is I'm still too new to it to offer too much advice - maybe in a month or two more of this I can stick my foot in my mouth properly - but if I had to give you something I would say that you have a sense of poetry more or less ready to go (some work fairly well in triades if not necessarily as self standing pieces) BUT that your stories seem to lack direction. I usually begin mine with a clear objective and they try to trim them down for brevity and effect. I can't exactly say I've mastered the art as this comp wasn't really successful but I think the second one in the set was better received but there are a few examples of other writers who have elevated the form. It's always a good idea to read extensively in the medium (this is my current favorite site for them www.sixwordstories.net/ ) to get an intuitive grasp of the rules and what has been done.
I hope that was at least somewhat helpful. Feel free to PM me whenever and I'll be happy to share what little I can. Best of luck with the writing! Hope to see your work out there soon!

#3 - sirosd (12/09/2015) [-]

I would think that lack of puntuation takes away a lot from some of these. For example, the only child one would be better if it was "Only child, still not their favourite"

#8 - smokeyrp ONLINE (12/10/2015) [-]

How did i get this papercut?

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