Supreme Leaders, I need honest opinions
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#14
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madb (12/14/2015) [-] 
what even is this? just two ******* guys waving guns around in a abandonend building. this is litarely nothing to go on. what am i even supoused to say?
"oh yeah i realy liked how that one guy pointed the gun upwards when he had hes back to a wall 10/10 it was super exiting"
"oh yeah i realy liked how that one guy pointed the gun upwards when he had hes back to a wall 10/10 it was super exiting"
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arealbountyhunter [OP](12/14/2015) [-] Its a trailer/teaser .. I'll get into detail in the first episode or even sooner in the second trailer. thanks for your honesty, it really means a lot.
#3
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norkasthethird (12/13/2015) [-] Looks interesting. Nice camerawork, although i felt you used the first person camera a bit too much.
Overall, i like it. Would love to see what happens next.
Overall, i like it. Would love to see what happens next.
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arealbountyhunter [OP](12/13/2015) [-] thanks. it means a lot. subscribe for the first episode, I post other random chnizels
#1
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schneidend (12/13/2015) [-] Hmmm. It didn't really draw me in until the end, where obviously I wanted to know what was in this case. There's no characterization going on, no real tension, and no sense of what or who these guys are.
#13
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lnyanchl ONLINE (12/13/2015) [-] A lot of the scene was just the camera panning to different locations, and there wasn't really anything to draw the viewer in except until the end. The way you are dressing seems odd if this is military.
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arealbountyhunter [OP](12/14/2015) [-] its not military, you'll see in the first episode. thanks for the feedback it really helps.
#10
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rylenwolf (12/13/2015) [-]
The way you are holding the gun the entire time is very shaky, it looks unnatural. As if you're holding it away from your body.
You have a tendency to point it upwards too much. From what I understand, militaries practice holding it downwards when they are not prepared to shoot. It might make it look more natural if you do that. (Exception being where you're actually looking up at the coliseum seats)
The ******* horrible sprinting action. You can tell that it's not realistic at all. It really detracts from the suspension of disbelief when people can pick up that it's exaggerated/fake. You don't want that. The more unrealistic stuff you do, the more the audience will think "That's so fake, this is a cheesy movie". For example, Bollywood movies, or the old ones from the 70s, the best example I can think of is this: www.youtube.com/watch?v=nAdniWncWu4 Where you can clearly see that his actions do not resemble that of a man who has been shot, especially with the way he moves around so much regarding the getting up from the mirror to the wall and then spinning himself around.
THanks for reading.
You have a tendency to point it upwards too much. From what I understand, militaries practice holding it downwards when they are not prepared to shoot. It might make it look more natural if you do that. (Exception being where you're actually looking up at the coliseum seats)
The ******* horrible sprinting action. You can tell that it's not realistic at all. It really detracts from the suspension of disbelief when people can pick up that it's exaggerated/fake. You don't want that. The more unrealistic stuff you do, the more the audience will think "That's so fake, this is a cheesy movie". For example, Bollywood movies, or the old ones from the 70s, the best example I can think of is this: www.youtube.com/watch?v=nAdniWncWu4 Where you can clearly see that his actions do not resemble that of a man who has been shot, especially with the way he moves around so much regarding the getting up from the mirror to the wall and then spinning himself around.
THanks for reading.
#9
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crispybomb (12/13/2015) [-] I don't know if the CoD vibe was what you were going for, but the camera angles and the weird sprinting thing you did with your gun gave off that vibe. Aside from that it looks fine, maybe add some furniture or something to that building because an empty place with a briefcase looks kinda weird.
#5
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anon (12/13/2015) [-]
Steps to succeed.
Step one: Dub it in English.
Step two: Stop muzzle sweeping your buddy. 1:03 don't think we didn't see.
Step three: The dialogue is going to be cringy **** I can already tell, write it again and do better this time.
But all that aside I'll probably watch it anyway.
Step one: Dub it in English.
Step two: Stop muzzle sweeping your buddy. 1:03 don't think we didn't see.
Step three: The dialogue is going to be cringy **** I can already tell, write it again and do better this time.
But all that aside I'll probably watch it anyway.
#4
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nakedandsexy (12/13/2015) [-] you look and walk like young adults, wich makes it hard to belive the whole "tactical" thingy. maybe wearing a mask of some sort would help? Nice editing and use of music though
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arealbountyhunter [OP](12/13/2015) [-] thanks a lot. we are young adults, its part of the plot.
you'll se what happens in the first episode
you'll se what happens in the first episode
#2
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arealbountyhunter [OP](12/13/2015) [-] thanks a lot. you'll know these two guys in the first episode.
the contents of the case will be revealed in the first episode too.
the contents of the case will be revealed in the first episode too.
