Two girls drawing fixed. got quite the negative feedback from you guys so i went back to this drawing in hopes to make it look better... what the hell is wrong with the right girls jaw XD girls drawing
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User avatar #1 - lexausaurusrex
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(04/01/2013) [-]
what the hell is wrong with the right girls jaw XD
User avatar #3 - goobyman
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(04/01/2013) [-]
you're not getting good feedback because this isn't /art
User avatar #2 - simplygabriele
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(04/01/2013) [-]
I admire your enthusiasm and the confidence to post your drawings, but I think that you really need a lot of practice...

First of all, it does not look like you have good pencils. Obtaining a couple of quality pencils will immensely improve the results of your hard work. I'd advise to begin with getting a couple of softer leads, say 4B and 2B ( generally "regular" pencils are HB, the middle ground, though some of the poorer quality are rather more brittle and hard than a HB should be). Softer lead will give you a better pay off, you'll be able to get the dark shadows you want without having to push hard and scratch the paper, making it loose the grip and texture and get the evil shininess.

Secondly, I think it would be a good idea for you to practice your stroke for smoother, more natural shadows. In short my tip would be - start with light strokes (that's where good pencils come in handy, but you don't need to instantly have the darkness you want, you can build it up), all IN THE SAME DIRECTION. When you're done covering the area you want to shade, switch the angle ever so slightly (we're talking about 5-10 degrees) and cover the area again. This will help you create both the depth and the darkness you want. But it requires practice.

Now, you must be aware of the fact that your anatomy is not very good. I'd simply advise you on looking up some tutorials that deal with proportions (youtube, deviantart, etc.). If I were you I'd try drawing separate body parts and just proportion studies before attempting these big full body pictures. The biggest issues in this drawing are the hands/feet, those are the parts that most people find very challenging. But aside from that, you might want to concentrate on the fact that bodies have more "soft mass" and little curves than these straight lines and angles. It all bends and bulges and deals with gravity. Those details really bring the figures to life.

Hope this was helpful to you.