Cliche, if I'm being perfectly honest. There's nothing exactly wrong with it and you did a good job, but it's just... interesting in a non-interesting way? I'm not entirely sure how to word that. I'm sure it would appeal to a younger demographic or work in a somewhat comedic setting (think Newgrounds flash games), but I'm not sure it would work if you're trying to tell a complex story.

I apologize for being harsh, but honesty is a necessary evil if you intend to carry on with arts into a professional setting. I see no indication of that in your post, but it is a caution to you none-the-less. Hope this helps in some way.